Notes on Dean Page's Article THE PER CAPITA COST OF EDUCATING STUDENTS AT THE PROPOSED WOMAN'S COLLEGE
1. The pencil marks on enclosed copy are annotations made by Dr. Alderman before handing it to me. In making suggestions we have considered these a part of the text. 2. Textual suggestions etc. (marked in blue) Page 1 "Some of the women of the state"-- Can you not make this more general, and make us a more considerable band? "Consist of men"-- Men is a little misleading, since some instructors may be women; but it is difficult to convey the idea without awkwardness. What can you suggest? Page 3 "One of equal standing etc"-- Would it not be better to say "one of standing and reputation equal to etc" for the sake of clearness? "Now if the Woman's College etc"-- Would it not be better to say "is located at Charlottesville, even on the eastern side" or something of the kind? I see your point, that this arrangement is practicable at the eastern end of Charlottesville, in spite of distance. I think that should be conveyed; but since we have agreed to leave the location of the college to the Board of Visitors in our next bill as in the original bill, it would seem to us better to leave it at that and make no official pronouncement at this time that would tend to make the matter of location an issue. "School of Latin"-- Would you add "of the University of Va? Page 4 "Near Charlottesville." Up to now you use the phrase "at Charlottesville." [*] Would it not be better to say "at" here instead of "near"? and so on in following paragraphs? "Hence if the Woman's College etc"-- We should like to see this paragraph so cast as to make the college away from Charlottesville more tentative and the college at Charlottesville more positive. Two suggestions follow: - "Hence if the Woman's College located away from Charlottesville is to be expected to stand even a chance of growing into an institution of standing and reputation equivalent to the present man's college, the total cost of the teaching staff would be at least double what it would be if the college is located etc" or "Hence, if it were proposed to establish in Virginia a woman's college located away from Charlottesville which is to stand even a chance of growing into an institution of standing and reputation equivalent to the present men's college, the fact would have to be faced that the total cost of thet [that] teaching staff would be at least double what it would be if the college is located etc"
- or in Charlottesville [written on left hand side of page]